Danielle, post what we discussed in class. Put it in a formatted, outline form.
Everyone else post your comments.
Wednesday, April 13, 2011
Monday, March 28, 2011
Tuesday, March 15, 2011
New Story
As you continue to break stories, keep in mind that you can work with a couple of different storylines and have them dovetail at the end to create a comedic twist.
Here are the makings of a story that incorporates several elements that we discussed in class.
Let's fill this out and turn this into a great story.
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Walter’s divorce is finalized. He’s completely depressed.
He listens to a karaoke tape of himself.
He finds a bottle of sleeping pills in Amanda’s bathroom.
Amanda comes home and hears a karaoke recording of Walter singing, “This’ll be the day that I die. This’ll be the day that I die" - (from "American Pie").
Amanda wants Walter to turn down the music. She gets no response.
She finds him in the bathtub, eyes closed, and sees an bottle of sleeping pills next to the tub.
She thinks he's trying to commit suicide.
Trying to save Walter's life, Amanda calls 9-1-1.
Walter is rushed to the hospital.
They pump his stomach.
Walter wakes up and finds himself in the ER.
He was just asleep.
He took one sleeping pill. The bottle was empty because there was only one pill left.
Doctors find out he doesn't have a prescription for the pills. He says he got it from Amanda.
But she doesn't have a prescription either. It's Sherry's prescription. But Amanda has been calling in the refills from a bottle Sherry left in the medicine cabinet.
When Walter lost his job, he lost his health insurance.
At the hospital, he’s handed a bill for $12,000.
He took a nap, and it cost him 12 grand.
He's completely pissed at Amanda.
Here are the makings of a story that incorporates several elements that we discussed in class.
Let's fill this out and turn this into a great story.
______________________________________________________
Walter’s divorce is finalized. He’s completely depressed.
He listens to a karaoke tape of himself.
He finds a bottle of sleeping pills in Amanda’s bathroom.
Amanda comes home and hears a karaoke recording of Walter singing, “This’ll be the day that I die. This’ll be the day that I die" - (from "American Pie").
Amanda wants Walter to turn down the music. She gets no response.
She finds him in the bathtub, eyes closed, and sees an bottle of sleeping pills next to the tub.
She thinks he's trying to commit suicide.
Trying to save Walter's life, Amanda calls 9-1-1.
Walter is rushed to the hospital.
They pump his stomach.
Walter wakes up and finds himself in the ER.
He was just asleep.
He took one sleeping pill. The bottle was empty because there was only one pill left.
Doctors find out he doesn't have a prescription for the pills. He says he got it from Amanda.
But she doesn't have a prescription either. It's Sherry's prescription. But Amanda has been calling in the refills from a bottle Sherry left in the medicine cabinet.
When Walter lost his job, he lost his health insurance.
At the hospital, he’s handed a bill for $12,000.
He took a nap, and it cost him 12 grand.
He's completely pissed at Amanda.
Monday, March 7, 2011
Walter and Dirk story
Take the elements we talked about and continue to flesh out the story until we have a well worked out, detailed outline.
Walter, the F.O. (First Officer) gets together with Dirk, the captain he flew with.
Dirk is Walter's hero. Dirk tolerates Walter.
Amanda tries to fix Walter up with women to help him move on after his wife, Betty, filed for divorce.
Walter commiserates with Dirk, drinking at the bar.
Dirk tells Walter he got another job – flying corporate.
Walter, desperate to get back to work, asks Dirk to help him get a job.
Amanda’s friend shows up at bar. She's gorgeous.
Walter is pissed that his time with Dirk has been interrupted.
He told Amanda he wasn't ready to start dating. He's still grieving.
Dirk perks up when he sees Amanda's friend.
He tells Walter he needs a place to crash.
Amanda sees that Walter brings Dirk home instead of the girl. Amanda is pissed.
Dirk now plays it like he's Walter’s best friend - but it's just to be around the girls, not Walter.
After Walter keeps pushing Dirk to help him get a job, Dirk finally explodes, revealing that he doesn't have a job.
(His ego wouldn't let him admit to anyone that he wasn't working.)
Dirk winds up with the girl Amanda tried fixing Walter up with.
The girl’s father owns a huge company.
Dirk gets a corporate flying job through the girl.
Amanda was trying to help Walter, but her efforts wind up helping Dirk instead.
Walter loses the job opportunity and his hero.
Again, Walter is pissed at Amanda for breaking up another one of his relationships.
Walter, the F.O. (First Officer) gets together with Dirk, the captain he flew with.
Dirk is Walter's hero. Dirk tolerates Walter.
Amanda tries to fix Walter up with women to help him move on after his wife, Betty, filed for divorce.
Walter commiserates with Dirk, drinking at the bar.
Dirk tells Walter he got another job – flying corporate.
Walter, desperate to get back to work, asks Dirk to help him get a job.
Amanda’s friend shows up at bar. She's gorgeous.
Walter is pissed that his time with Dirk has been interrupted.
He told Amanda he wasn't ready to start dating. He's still grieving.
Dirk perks up when he sees Amanda's friend.
He tells Walter he needs a place to crash.
Amanda sees that Walter brings Dirk home instead of the girl. Amanda is pissed.
Dirk now plays it like he's Walter’s best friend - but it's just to be around the girls, not Walter.
After Walter keeps pushing Dirk to help him get a job, Dirk finally explodes, revealing that he doesn't have a job.
(His ego wouldn't let him admit to anyone that he wasn't working.)
Dirk winds up with the girl Amanda tried fixing Walter up with.
The girl’s father owns a huge company.
Dirk gets a corporate flying job through the girl.
Amanda was trying to help Walter, but her efforts wind up helping Dirk instead.
Walter loses the job opportunity and his hero.
Again, Walter is pissed at Amanda for breaking up another one of his relationships.
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