Amanda walks in the apartment and finds Walter’s laptop computer open. His wife's face book status is updated to single, with a photo of her smiling. She hears Walter singing horribly in the bathroom and knocks, barging in when Walter doesn’t answer. A dog runs out of the bathroom as the door opens. Once in the bathroom, Amanda notices that Walter is in the tub unconscious with an empty pill bottle floating in the water. Walter’s skin is dyed red from the pills dissolving in the water. Amanda discovers the pill bottle is that of the sleeping pills she refills that used to belong to her roommate. Amanda freaks out and starts yelling at Walter as she tries to wake him before she either calls the police or takes him to the hospital herself. As Amanda drags Walter out the door, the audience sees the dog run into the bathroom.
EXT HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM
Amanda takes Walter to the hospital, pulls up to the emergency entrance and kicks him out on the curb naked. Amanda moves her car and hides in the bushes to make sure someone takes him. Amanda enters the hospital as Walter is carried in on a stretcher. In the process she meets a doctor who she flirts with.
INT HOSPITAL HALLWAY
Walter on the other hand begins to regain consciousness and tries to convince everyone around him that he is fine. A nurse injects something into Walter’s arm before he can protest and he passes out.
INT HOSPITAL ROOM
Walter awakens to Amanda shaking him. Demanding to know how he got to the hospital, Amanda admits that she brought him there fearing he had tried to commit suicide. Walter demands Amanda help get him out of the situation saying he will put all of the blame on her if she doesn’t. Distracting multiple doctors by flirting with them, the two successfully sneak out of the hospital.
INT APARTMENT
Once home Walter is so exhausted he passes out in his hammock still wearing the hospital gown. The next morning Walter wakes up and Amanda tells him she’s glad the dog is gone. Walter is confused, but suddenly he realizes he had used his dead dog as a pillow all night. (You can tell the dog died from drinking the bathwater because its muzzle will be dyed red.) Fade out on Walter screaming.
The dog is kind of a weird addition. Where did it come from? I don't think it needs to be there personally, the episode is funny without it. Also, why does Amanda kick Walter out of the car in front of the hospital? Does she not want the cute doctors to see that she is with him and think he is her husband or something?
The kicking him out of the car is something I feel is more a drug addict thing to do, I don't understand the hiding in the bushes. I think you could add more conflict if amanda walks him in and then the doctors want to know what walter took and how he got the pills. Amanda however turns it into a chance to flirt with the doctor or something.
I like that walter has to threaten amanda with the blame to get her to sneak him out. I also think if Walter is out of it because of everything that maybe Amanda literally has to drag or carry Walter out of the hospital.
The whole point of Amanda sneaking Walter in is so that she can sneak him out without the two of the ever having the chance to be identified. I understand your point with the dog, we came up with it in class and thought it as a nice cherry on top of the already horrible day. But I do understand that it might be a bit too over the top. The reasoning behind it was that his wife had dropped the dog off after the divorce was finalized. Thanks for the ideas. Solutions as well as conflicts might help as well.
I think this is a great concept. The whole show should be based on one confusing scenario after another building through out. I agree the dog doesn't serve any purpose of moving the story forward.
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Amanda walks in the apartment and finds Walter’s laptop computer open.
His wife's face book status is updated to single, with a photo of her smiling.
She hears Walter singing horribly in the bathroom and knocks, barging in when Walter doesn’t answer.
A dog runs out of the bathroom as the door opens.
Once in the bathroom, Amanda notices that Walter is in the tub unconscious with an empty pill bottle floating in the water.
Walter’s skin is dyed red from the pills dissolving in the water.
Amanda discovers the pill bottle is that of the sleeping pills she refills that used to belong to her roommate.
Amanda freaks out and starts yelling at Walter as she tries to wake him before she either calls the police or takes him to the hospital herself.
As Amanda drags Walter out the door, the audience sees the dog run into the bathroom.
EXT HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM
Amanda takes Walter to the hospital, pulls up to the emergency entrance and kicks him out on the curb naked.
Amanda moves her car and hides in the bushes to make sure someone takes him.
Amanda enters the hospital as Walter is carried in on a stretcher. In the process she meets a doctor who she flirts with.
INT HOSPITAL HALLWAY
Walter on the other hand begins to regain consciousness and tries to convince everyone around him that he is fine.
A nurse injects something into Walter’s arm before he can protest and he passes out.
INT HOSPITAL ROOM
Walter awakens to Amanda shaking him.
Demanding to know how he got to the hospital, Amanda admits that she brought him there fearing he had tried to commit suicide. Walter demands Amanda help get him out of the situation saying he will put all of the blame on her if she doesn’t.
Distracting multiple doctors by flirting with them, the two successfully sneak out of the hospital.
INT APARTMENT
Once home Walter is so exhausted he passes out in his hammock still wearing the hospital gown.
The next morning Walter wakes up and Amanda tells him she’s glad the dog is gone. Walter is confused, but suddenly he realizes he had used his dead dog as a pillow all night. (You can tell the dog died from drinking the bathwater because its muzzle will be dyed red.)
Fade out on Walter screaming.
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The dog is kind of a weird addition. Where did it come from? I don't think it needs to be there personally, the episode is funny without it. Also, why does Amanda kick Walter out of the car in front of the hospital? Does she not want the cute doctors to see that she is with him and think he is her husband or something?
ReplyDeleteThe kicking him out of the car is something I feel is more a drug addict thing to do, I don't understand the hiding in the bushes. I think you could add more conflict if amanda walks him in and then the doctors want to know what walter took and how he got the pills. Amanda however turns it into a chance to flirt with the doctor or something.
ReplyDeleteI like that walter has to threaten amanda with the blame to get her to sneak him out. I also think if Walter is out of it because of everything that maybe Amanda literally has to drag or carry Walter out of the hospital.
The whole point of Amanda sneaking Walter in is so that she can sneak him out without the two of the ever having the chance to be identified. I understand your point with the dog, we came up with it in class and thought it as a nice cherry on top of the already horrible day. But I do understand that it might be a bit too over the top. The reasoning behind it was that his wife had dropped the dog off after the divorce was finalized. Thanks for the ideas. Solutions as well as conflicts might help as well.
ReplyDeleteI think this is a great concept. The whole show should be based on one confusing scenario after another building through out. I agree the dog doesn't serve any purpose of moving the story forward.
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